Cohesive Exercise

"This exercise was intended to help our class understand the elements of writing cohesion. I didn't really feel that this exercise was very helpful. I think the main reason for this is that the instructions were a little too vague and the purpose was not thoroughly explained."

In an excerpt from her book, The Fat Girl’s Guide to Life, Wendy Shanker presents her philosophies on living in our society as an overweight woman. She clearly defines her ethos as a “woman on a mission”. *This attitude is not one that has a feeling of duty or honor; rather it is more of a [Rambo-esque mentality. @This ethos] almost lends an air of emotionally blocked logic to the piece; [the author plays strongly on personal opinion. @The author also explicitly states that she is not educated in any field of medicine], just [a woman with “a chip on my shoulder”.@ This in and of itself] kills any credibility the article might have had by directly displaying ignorance towards any intellectual findings on the subject of obesity.

In their articles, Reilly and Achenbach are both argue against swearing. *However, [their reasons and approaches to this issue are slightly different. @{Achenbach feels we should] limit the use of the "F word" to special occasions; that it has become to widespread. @[He argues} that if we are not careful, it will begin to lose its profane meaning; not that it is actually "bad". @Achenbach says] that we should reserve this "special" word for adults and certain situations. [Reilly argues mainly against public swearing, specifically at sporting events (he is a writer for Sports Illustrated). @He feels] that swearing has become to publicly offensive and widespread. Both writers support less swearing as a general practice; Achenbach for social usage reasons, Reilly because swearing is “bad”. I definitely buy into Achenbach’s argument much more. I feel that the occasional use of the “F-word” is perfectly acceptable; however, one does need to limit this usage or it will lose its desired effects.